GRE作文入门和进阶二十二

　　Once I participated a speech given by a famous local entrepreneur， who rose from exactly bare hands. The word brands me most is “loyalty¹”， the very one we hardly dabble² and almost reaches the edge of oblivion but instead no negligence³ is deserve. How can this concept bridge the relation with the huge lope of his life？ Loyalty makes one stick to a goal without any fickleness⁴ until achievement， which has won a lot much for him including friendship， dependability and love. Ironically， today's people is becoming more and more “sagacious” to plan for themselves better， holding the principles of choosing best， moving fastest， and snatching most； in other words， loyalty is degenerated⁵ into a totem of stubborn stereotype⁶ inadaptable for the society of profits first.

　　Is that modern theory “true”？ And what about the success of that admiring entrepreneur？ Something people primarily should understand is the indispensability of credence⁷ active among human community for the perpetuity of humanistic relationship， which to a large extent stems from this loyalty. No exaggeration I have made to emphasize its paramount⁸ function to personal survival， either from the fable⁹ or history we can learn the lesson. But now I would like to continue to elicit¹⁰ the example of that manager upstairs. When he is still an employee working for this consult company （before he climbed up to the top rung of the company committee）， there was a huge recession leading to a total profits declination in this operating domain¹¹， in the end results almost all elites¹² of the company to make a job exchange except him. His persistent¹³ determination was for nothing but loyalty， of his indebtedness form his boss， of his enamored undertaking¹⁴ tolerating for no intermittence¹⁵， of his adherence¹⁶ to goal successful for sure. And fact tells us everything， as each audience can see， he did.

　　Not only to individual the quality of loyalty can push one into the acme¹⁷ of his career following with winsome¹⁸ reputation， but also to community the crucial pillar to support the sculpture of serenity¹⁹ goddess. Once separated from the loyalty， credence also accordingly right away being crushed under the wheels of history cart， and then the concomitant condition can be imagined as this： various associations would be certainly collapsed²⁰ under the circumstance deprived of dependability， each one discredits²¹ the motive²² of action from anyone else， talking is evolved into a serial²³ of satirical assaults， compassion²⁴ sounds more like a snicker， and ultimately ineluctably the human society is degraded into a state of depravity. Is this the community we each of us want to live in？ Is this the situation we each of us want to make realized？ If your answer is negative-just like mine-then please retrospect²⁵ your conscience to retrieve²⁶ this precious virtue²⁷ of “loyalty”。

　　While the merits of loyalty have been corroborated²⁸ here so strongly， admittedly， however， loyalty applied²⁹ only to the legitimate³⁰ partner or purpose， not involves the malign³¹ ones， somehow or other the effect will surely arrive at the surprising reverse. For instance， from the point of penal³² law， excluding the major miscreants³³ who abet³⁴ the underlings to commit guilt³⁵， the adherent³⁶ to follow his felony， even if he never directly join in the crime doing on the spot， but as a result of his ancillary³⁷ work， he should also assume a certain quantity of the great responsibility， which might mean him a ferocity of being disenfranchised， or at the same time to enjoy his later few years' prime time in the jail. The tragedy is so natural for most of us that admonishing³⁸ clock is being struck； the high time for us to wake up from the sequacious³⁹ loyalty is coming.

　　Overall， the virtue of loyalty is one of the fundamental factor heading for our prosperous tomorrow， despite its contain of some potential stygian side effect turning to the malicious⁴⁰ dimension， yet no doubt it deserves to be advocated to learn for the brace⁴¹ of the beneficial development of both single person and gross society. Like the rationale of any medicine we take normally， no one of us will stop to ingest pills of penicillin⁴² just because its possible allergy⁴³ to some particular patients， after all its application and efficacy is indelible. （700 words）

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